RaulEsteban

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I +++ very interested in policy. I always read newspapers and see the news on TV since I was a child. Many people think policy is really boring but if you know the current situation in the nation/world you can undestand better your enviroment and choose better your decisions. Because I enjoy it, I studied Political Science at the university although the career was annoying sometimes due to the professors. A few years ago, I collaborate in a organisation that performed works (?) about the national policy situation. I admit that the level of the politicians in Spain is very low. I don´t mind driving, I think this is a wonderful activity for a person, you can feel free and go __**to**__ almost everywhere at any time. Speed is a great sensation for me even +++ I don´t long run. I cant´t bear +++ depend of the operation of the trains or the buses, I don´t like waiting quiet in the stop. In my car, I can put on the air conditioning if it´s hot and the calefaction if it´s cold and do the way with any problem. Unfortunetly, __**the**__ petrol is very expensive and the distances in Madrid are so long. I´m noy very keen on gossip magazines, I don´t understand why many people likes +++ follow the live of famous persons that the doesnt´t meet. In Spain, there is a big industry of agencies that spy and take photographs of famous people anytime around the country. The persecutions must be terrible for that persons and they cry to heaven when they see their intimacies in TV programs and revists. Also, I really hate unknown girls that appear on television and make a lot of money telling +++ their relationships with famous people and doesn´t matter the injury done to others. I don´t like agglomerations, I hate when I am at the disco and there is many people in a small site. I can´t hear the music or I can´t ak for a coke in the bar. In the period of discounts, all the people in malls run from shop to shop buying and look +++ the windows even +++ they don´t need anything. They must always return after a lot of articles (?) to the store. Also, when there are many women at the sales area the employee doesn´t attend you correctly because he haven´t +++ time for everybody. I prefer to do my shopping when there is nobody around me and I can choose with confidence.

Great Raul very ineresting ideas! Now try to correct your errors.

OK, thank you Emma. I try to correct the the next in aquamarine colour. Is now OK Emma? Thank you.

I ​ am very interested in politics. I always readed (no idea here, sorry WHAT TENSE IS USED WITH PREPOSOTION SINCE?) newspapers and watch the news on TV since I was a child. Many people think politics is really boring but if you know the current situation in the nation/world you can understand better your enviroment and make better decisions. Because I enjoy it, I studied Political Science at the university although the degree was annoying sometimes due to the professors. A few years ago, I collaborated in a organisation that do works​/STUDIES/reports (?) ​concerning the national politics situation. I admit that the level of the politicians in Spain is very low. I like driving, I think this is a wonderful activity for a person, you can feel free and go almost everywhere at any time. Speed is a great sensation for me even when I don´t drive fast. I cant´t bear to depend on trains or the buses, I don´t like waiting still at the stop. In my car, I can put on the air conditioning if it´s hot and the heater if it´s cold and do the itinerary with no problem. Unfortunately, petrol is very expensive and the distances in Madrid are so long. I´m not very keen on gossip magazines, I don´t understand why many people like to follow the lifes of famous people that they don´t meet. In Spain, there is a big industry of agencies that spy and take photographs of famous people anytime around the country. The persecutions must be terrible for those people and they cry to heaven when they see their intimacies in TV programs and magazines. Also, I really hate unknown girls that appear on television and make a lot of money telling ​ their relationships with famous people and don´t care about the pain done to others. I don´t like ​mass of people, I hate when I am at the disco and there are a lot of people in a small place. I can´t hear the music or I can´t ask for a coke in the bar. In the period of discounts, all the people in malls run from shop to shop buying and looking at​ the windows even when they don´t need anything. They always must return after a lot of consumer goods (the things which they bought previously) to the store. Also, when there are many women at the sales area the employee doesn´t serve you correctly because he hasn´t got anytime for everybody. I prefer to do my shopping when there is nobody around me and I can choose with confidence.

My favorite monument in Madrid.

My favorite monument in Madrid is the Santiago Bernabéu Stadium. The stadium is located in the Paseo de la Castellana in Madrid, the most important street of the city. For the fans of Real Madrid, it´s a magic place to dream in each match. The Tour of Bernabéu may receive more than 600,000 visitors in a season. The architects were Manuel Muñoz Monasterio and Luis Salvador Alemany and the constructor company was Huarte&Co. The stadium was inagurated in 1947. The first match was a Real Madrid against Os Belenenses on December 14, 1947 resulting in victory for the home team 3-1. The financing was very difficult but the members and supporters contributed money for construction. The work lasted three years. The stadiums holds now 87,000 spectators and within it are the trophy room, offices, restaurants and shopping area with the official store club. In 2007 UEFA gave five stars to Real Madrid and the Santiago Bernabéu Stadium was included in their list of Elite Stadiums. The last renovation of the stadium includes the reform of the street side of Padre Damián, the modernization of the dressing rooms, elevators, VIP boxes, several restaurants. With the installation of heating equipment, spectators can watch the matches in winter without shivering. A typical match day up to 2,500 people work to ensure that everything runs smoothly. The atmosphere is very nice every Sunday and it is a guarantee of income for the neighborhood bars and restaurants.

Write about the World Cup.

I feel so happy because Spain finally won the World Cup. The final was an interesting match and I were very nervous with my friends during the game and I shouting at the players and the ref constantly. The spanish people need a trophy like that. The economic situation is very bad and this is a excuse to reconstruct the national spirit. I like football very much and I watched almost every game and then talked about it with my friends and colleagues. In the tournament, I like the football practicing Germany and Argentina but the best team was Spain. We have an excellent generation of players and I think they can repeat results in the next championships. Our defense was very strong and the rivals have failed to score goalds easily. I think that Sunday night the birth rate rise in Spain by the excitement of victory. Million of supporters saw the games and I think football is the only thing that moves so much passion around the world. All the children dream that they will play a final match with their team and win score a goal like Andrés Iniesta. One of the nicest things of the World Cup was the Shakira´s song, dance fun and easy. Multinational companies are paying close attention to the event becase it´s a great way to get sales and advertising. In summary, it has been the best tournament in history because Spain has won the final and I´ve finally been able to celebrate the great victory. Spain rules in Europe and over the football world!!!

Great Raul already seeing an improvement in your writing

HI EMMA, I CORRECT THE TWO TEXT BUT I´M NOT SURE THAT THE TEXTS ARE OK.

Raúl recipe :-) Four servings

Ingredients: 250 gr. chickpeas 1 foot of pork, salting 500 gr. beef sausage 6 small potatoes 1/4 chicken (standard size) 1/2 kg. of carrots, leeks and cabbage 100 gr. of salt pork 1 ham bone 1 knee bone veal 1 black pudding 1 sausage Salt

In a big pot ​full of cold water put in​ all the meat and all the vegetables and chickpeas ​ but those separated with a mesh colander. The vegetables and the chickpeas must be in water the previous night. Add salt and boil slowly about three hours. The first course is ​soap with noodles. For this, you put part of the broth in another pot and when the broth boils much​ you add the noodles until the ​noodles have been boiled. ​Chickpeas are served in a ​platter with the meat around the platter. In another ​platter you serve the vegetables, potatoes, sausage and black pudding. The two plattes are served at the same time with a sauce boat of tomato sauce to accompany.

Bon appetit!

Holidays in Thailand.

I booked __a__ hotel in __Bangkok__. I went with my family and some friends. The first day, we needed relaxing time in the room because we were very tired and we had jet lag. The second day, the guide helped us and we visited the most important monuments of the city and we ate __that__ typical food. The third day, we also saw more buildings and temples and we saw a traditional show with thai dancers. Unfortunately, the weather was very bad and we didn´t leave __to__ the hotel for two days because it was raining a lot. When the sun returned, we went to a small village in the interior of the country and we learned things about the ancestral lifestyle in Thailand. We met a couple who work in a __Non-Governmental Organization__ helping poor people. This day we had a travel on an elephant. The elephant smelled horrible and we didn´t like the experience. In the end of the travel, my girlfriend was ill and she needed a doctor. He gave her some medicines and she recuperated quickly. We didn´t see the famous prostitution because we didn´t go to the bad area of Bangkok. At the airport, one of my __friends__ had a problem with his passport but he was able to solve with the help of the spanish embassy. Then, we returned to Madrid with a lot of presents for our friends and relatives.

nice review Raul well done!

Tom and Sally set off at 8:00 am very early, they wanted to take all day walking in a rainforest. They took a bag with a knife, a canteen, something to eat and a first-aid kit. Their friends Jack and Hillary preferred to stay asleep because they were frightened by the idea of having a rainforest adventure without a local guide. Tom and Sally saw a panther, snakes, birds and many other wild animals while there were walking through the rainforest. They found a great treasure of gold and they were very pleased and happy. The treasure had been there for ages because it had belonged to an ancient civilization that diet out in the portuguese colonization. Indigenous people buried the treasure but the rain had unearthed it. They carried it with with them but the treasure was very heavy and they couldn´t walk fast. Unfortunately, the weather changed and it started raining a lot. For these reasons, they got lost on the way back to the village. They were worried because they had forgotten to take with them a compass and two coats to protect themselves from rain. When it got dark, they tried to find a place to stay and they found a cave on a large grotto. A big spider attacked them while thery were trying to sleep. At first, they tried to kill it with the knife and a wood but the spider was very strong and they ran out without the treasure. After that incident, they survived staying under a big tree. They ate all the food they had. In the end, they had just little water. Tom and Sally could make fire in the rainforest with some branches. Jack and Hillary had gone to search them and they saw the fire and the smoke. When Jack and Hillary finally found them, Tom and Sally were trying to hunt a tucan and were getting water from rain. Tom and Sally told them the story about the treasure and that they had been searching it for three days in the rainforest. They were lucky and they found the cave with the treasure but the bad spider attacked them again. Jack launched a fire stick to the spider and the spider died. They caught the treasure and went to the guest house. When they got back to the guest house they phoned their relatives and told them the story about the treasure and the spider. Now they´re very rich and live in Chelsea, the posh neighborhood of London.
 * 4C Rainforest adventure**